Wednesday, January 04, 2006

Spots

The shy moon
tries hard to hide
Six weeks of clearsil
and the spots won't go

The stars laugh
at the sight
How would any of us be
if it weren't for the dark night

6 comments:

anshuman said...

Really nice. Your style has changed. From broad, meandering stokes on canvas to well chiselled sculptures.

david raphael israel said...

In the 2nd stanza, the nature of the stars' laughter is interesting. In the first line, one might suppose they're merely laughing at the moon. But the final 2 lines suggest they also laugh at their own expense (as well as the futility of hiding): that which gives them existence (both moon & stars) is the dark night. Because of which, efforts to hide are futile. The 1st stanza though has a curious twist. The effort of the moon to hide is conventional enough in poetry: it veils itself and reveals itself in the monthly cycle. The cause (motivation) for its famous tendency to shy away from sight seems more novel: the poet identifies a cosmetic malady . . .

for 8 very short lines, there's much there. Interesting intro to your work -- thanks.
d.i.

Parul Gahlot said...

anshuman and d.i.: Thank you both for your insight!

Come On ... said...

Hi...

Through roaming around I come to your blog(actually I’m looking to learn to create creative blog)

the last line is really very deep....if weren't for the dark....it says lot...lot.....

If we weren't for the dark then how could we tell the world the story of moonlight!!


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Dan Husain said...

I liked it! The mocking stars especially. :-)

mermaid said...

Clever comparison of the human condition and nature.